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posted on September 2nd, 2010, 5:10 am
Last edited by jetnova16 on September 2nd, 2010, 5:14 am, edited 1 time in total.
I'm not sure if there is a thread for this type of thing already but I tried to run a search for it and found nothing for it so I figured since I'm not only a modder creating a new mod and a student in a class dedicated to game design (maybe something that I should be taking for non-credit I'm starting to think because of the errors with my mod), I want to intorduce you all to a Star Trek novel that I started in 2007 and then finished in about 2008 but after I had one copy published for my personal self through a self-publishing site, I found many errors and typos so I decided to start making revisions to the whole novel and to also expand the story even further.
A little warning for the novel:
1) Some names have some errors to it and they are one of the major changes.
2) The title of the novel is going to be changed for the final version.
3) There is alot of time travel in the novel and it spans all the generations of Star Trek, but I did try to stay as close to canon as possible but I also stuck to the newer novels to so it wouldn't be that confusing (This does include William Shatners Star Trek Novels: "The Ashes of Eden", "The Return", "Avenger", "Spectre", "Dark Victory", "Preserver", "Captain's Glory", "Captain's Blood", and "Captain's Peril".
4) This is the most important once, I support the Captain Jonathan Archer and Commander T'Pol relationship, so the novel starts after Trip's death in 2161, I don't consider his death a hoax unlike Andy Mangles and Robert Martin.
You will have to download the novel from Megaupload because it is too big of a file to attach here and I am sorry that that is the case. If yo uread it, I welcome any ideas and commentary along with any critism too. Please if you want to leave any ideas, let me know what page the changes should go to and also and ideas you have for the additions. Thank you so very much for your interest in this novel.
[sub]OLD TITLE:
Star Trek Enterprise Time's Mergence
NEW TITLE:
Star Trek Legacy The Rise And Fall Of The United Federation of Planets[/sub]
The Novel In Pre-revisions Form:
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A little warning for the novel:
1) Some names have some errors to it and they are one of the major changes.
2) The title of the novel is going to be changed for the final version.
3) There is alot of time travel in the novel and it spans all the generations of Star Trek, but I did try to stay as close to canon as possible but I also stuck to the newer novels to so it wouldn't be that confusing (This does include William Shatners Star Trek Novels: "The Ashes of Eden", "The Return", "Avenger", "Spectre", "Dark Victory", "Preserver", "Captain's Glory", "Captain's Blood", and "Captain's Peril".
4) This is the most important once, I support the Captain Jonathan Archer and Commander T'Pol relationship, so the novel starts after Trip's death in 2161, I don't consider his death a hoax unlike Andy Mangles and Robert Martin.
You will have to download the novel from Megaupload because it is too big of a file to attach here and I am sorry that that is the case. If yo uread it, I welcome any ideas and commentary along with any critism too. Please if you want to leave any ideas, let me know what page the changes should go to and also and ideas you have for the additions. Thank you so very much for your interest in this novel.
[sub]OLD TITLE:
Star Trek Enterprise Time's Mergence
NEW TITLE:
Star Trek Legacy The Rise And Fall Of The United Federation of Planets[/sub]
The Novel In Pre-revisions Form:
MEGAUPLOAD - The leading online storage and file delivery service
The Synpsis to the Revised form of the novel:
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posted on September 2nd, 2010, 12:17 pm
First impression: The writing style is not the most accessible jumping from scene to scene. Especially to those who are not familiar to star trek it can be quite difficult to get started in the storyline.
A cosmetic note: page numbers would be greatly appreciated.
A cosmetic note: page numbers would be greatly appreciated.
posted on September 2nd, 2010, 8:44 pm
Andre27 wrote:First impression: The writing style is not the most accessible jumping from scene to scene. Especially to those who are not familiar to star trek it can be quite difficult to get started in the storyline.
A cosmetic note: page numbers would be greatly appreciated.
Do you have any ideas to fix the writting style? The novel was set into parts to try and prevent jumping from scene to scene but at the same time I tried to stick more to dialogue than the descriptive parts of many things, mostly because I thought that those who would read the novel would already be familar with Star Trek as a whole. I could and can work on that for the final version as well.
Most of the story for the Enterprise era takes place in what we would call the "Lost Years" so none of would really know what happens there so I was thinking of the term "Poetic License" alot well writting it.
Your ideas and suggestions will be greatly appreciated.
posted on September 3rd, 2010, 8:48 am
What Andre said. Even inside one scene there is a lot of jumping back and forth.
Plus some mistakes: spelling, grammar and you switch between past tense and present while narrating. Also it's way to fast and way to much "information" in one load. You don't really narrate, you just tell everything. No real dramaturgy, not the slightest ounce of suspense. You give away right from the start, what will happen, what the mysterious research is, etc. Plus the characters are dull and uninteresting. They're just names randomly thrown at the reader.
You really should read much more to get some inspiration on how to do a captivating narrative. Read some Hemingway for example. There you can see how you can absorb the reader even into seemingly trivial events and give them a very deep meaning.
Always ask yourself: What is my story about? Why should the reader care? Why should the characters care?
Plus some mistakes: spelling, grammar and you switch between past tense and present while narrating. Also it's way to fast and way to much "information" in one load. You don't really narrate, you just tell everything. No real dramaturgy, not the slightest ounce of suspense. You give away right from the start, what will happen, what the mysterious research is, etc. Plus the characters are dull and uninteresting. They're just names randomly thrown at the reader.
You really should read much more to get some inspiration on how to do a captivating narrative. Read some Hemingway for example. There you can see how you can absorb the reader even into seemingly trivial events and give them a very deep meaning.
Always ask yourself: What is my story about? Why should the reader care? Why should the characters care?
posted on September 3rd, 2010, 7:57 pm
machinor wrote:What Andre said. Even inside one scene there is a lot of jumping back and forth.
Plus some mistakes: spelling, grammar and you switch between past tense and present while narrating. Also it's way to fast and way to much "information" in one load. You don't really narrate, you just tell everything. No real dramaturgy, not the slightest ounce of suspense. You give away right from the start, what will happen, what the mysterious research is, etc. Plus the characters are dull and uninteresting. They're just names randomly thrown at the reader.
You really should read much more to get some inspiration on how to do a captivating narrative. Read some Hemingway for example. There you can see how you can absorb the reader even into seemingly trivial events and give them a very deep meaning.
Always ask yourself: What is my story about? Why should the reader care? Why should the characters care?
I can say one thing, Paramount and Pocket Books liked my writting style and the only thing they didn't like actually was the Time Travel and slight addition of new characters, not the ones on the new Miranda-class Starship, just the new characters on the old ships.
I read alot of books, especially alot of Star Trek and I have followed the style of some of the other best authors they have. I read only the books that I like and I never liked Hemmingway or Shakespear for that matter.
To understand the charcters, you actually have to understand them from the TV series first, you would need so much back information to understand every one of them.
The captiviating parts are in Part 3, the first parts are a back story and aren't relevant except getting to the timeline and all that happens in Part 3 and Part 4. That's where all the drama, and the parts to catch the reader's interest are. I know many people that have read it that live locally where I'm from actually enjoyed it and also liked the style of writting.
Because of the spelling and grammer errors, that is why I'm making revisions, but as it is spellcheck can't handle alien words that are Star Trek related.
So do you have any suggestions that could fix that? Can you post/copy the parts that are jumping back and forth? Because I know that when writting anything that isn't in the same time or area is seperated by ****, this seperates all sections that change.
posted on September 3rd, 2010, 8:01 pm
jetnova16 wrote:Because of the spelling and grammer errors, that is why I'm making revisions, but as it is spellcheck can't handle alien words that are Star Trek related.
So do you have any suggestions that could fix that?
Add the alien words to your dictionary as you do the spellcheck. Then when you come across the word again it won't worry about it, unless you have misspelled the alien word at some point. Then it should flag it as a spelling mistake.
posted on September 3rd, 2010, 8:07 pm
loki_999 wrote:Add the alien words to your dictionary as you do the spellcheck. Then when you come across the word again it won't worry about it, unless you have misspelled the alien word at some point. Then it should flag it as a spelling mistake.
I met any idead for the narration of the novel and how to intorduce and describe the characters and to make it possible to switch between scenes well enough not to confuse those who are confused.
posted on September 3rd, 2010, 8:15 pm
Oh, sorry, you confused me. 
posted on September 10th, 2010, 4:40 am
Does anyone have anymore suggestions for the novel? Well either way, I haven't been working on this right now, I've been doing more work on my Star Trek Armada II mod but with the crashing errors and little help in solving them, maybe I should actually get back to my original self-originated project (this novel) and start working on it again.
(PS- Does anyone know if the submission guidelines for submitting a Star Trek Novel have been updated? Last time I checked, they hadn't been updated since 2004, I atached the guidelines from 2004 to help anyone in suggesting ideas.)
Note: These attachments are not in any particular order and some might have been posted already or they might not have been. I'll be happy for some information on them and some ideas, I'm currently working on a Coda part too... sneak peak, T'Pol is going to get pregnant again, and I need some unique non-used Vulcan names that can fit a Vulcan-Human Hybrid child.
(PS- Does anyone know if the submission guidelines for submitting a Star Trek Novel have been updated? Last time I checked, they hadn't been updated since 2004, I atached the guidelines from 2004 to help anyone in suggesting ideas.)
Note: These attachments are not in any particular order and some might have been posted already or they might not have been. I'll be happy for some information on them and some ideas, I'm currently working on a Coda part too... sneak peak, T'Pol is going to get pregnant again, and I need some unique non-used Vulcan names that can fit a Vulcan-Human Hybrid child.
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